Question of the day: Agents have said they love my concept but they aren't "drawn in." I wrote it in the third person. Do you think that changing it to first person POV will help?
Without having read the manuscript in question, I can offer an assured...maybe. :)
Is that not helpful?
Okay, I'll elaborate. On one hand, yes, I think that there is no doubt that first person POV draws readers in more quickly and is often (not always) easier for the reader to relate to. So if this is truly your only hiccup, then yes, I'd say rewrite it. On the other hand, "not drawn in" may be agent speak for "I'm just not that into you." Agents are people too, and they don't want to have to be the bad guy and say, "Gee, I really just don't like this," so "not drawn in," may effectively be their way of saying they're not interested on taking you on date #2.
Again, I haven't read the manuscript, so I can't say. If you really think this is an amazing concept, and your rejections are simply a matter of execution - and you're willing to invest the time in more or less entirely rewriting the manuscript - then I say go for it. The only thing I will say as cautionary advice is that sometimes, writers have a hard time seeing the forest through the trees. In other words, perhaps this manuscript was a tool for you to figure out how to become a better writer and not the one you ultimately sell. I have one of those tucked away in the figurative back of my drawer, and let me tell you, I am soooooo grateful that it never got published. At the time, I didn't see it that way. But now that I've honed my skills, I can and I do. Not every book you write is necessarily going to be a good one, and this is more often true of first books. So if you can, try to assess the manuscript honestly and objectively, and if you can't do that right now, perhaps step away from it for a few months and return to it with fresh eyes. If you still think it's as good as you do now, then invest the time in reworking it. The other option is to have someone else read it, someone whose opinion you trust, and be okay with his/her honest feedback. Our critique partners often see the flaws that we cannot.
So...a murky answer to your question. The bottom line is that rewriting it will certainly prove valuable for you as a writer - it will give you the chance to continue to stretch yourself and flex your writing muscles, but just be sure that you'd still be okay in the end if the manuscript doesn't sell. Even after all of your work.
What say you readers? Would you recommend that she rewrite the ms? Or do you think she'd be better off focusing her energy elsewhere? Has anyone ever rewritten a ms with a different POV and had success?